For some reason your vulgarity in the preview didn't sit well with me, and I'm a firm believer that "bad" words are only "bad" words because we say they are, thus making them not really "bad" since they aren't inherently so. Thinking in that same vein however, I also don't find them to be necessary in things like a game preview, without all the things said before b*tch when talking about Mana, just calling her a b*tch would have been better IMO. There were also a few grammar errors and typos, like you meant to say, "And thus you begin your daily toil..." instead you have, "And thus you being your daily toil..."
Other than that I thought it was a really good, and well written preview for a game that I really wasn't too interested in previous to reading your preview. An added bonus is that my brother can read kanji and imports lots of text heavy games and is willing to translate for me. So I just might import this game just to get started and see about that second generation you can play as.
edit: had a typo in there myself lol